考研英語看圖作文範例點評：男女失衡
看圖作文在英語作文中是大家普遍缺乏練習的一種類型，一個提高的方式就是看範例和點評，針對其中的錯誤進行自我修正。
男女失衡：
寫作原文
In the picture,there is an unbalanced(改爲imbalanced，imbalance表示“失衡，不平衡”，而unbalance表示“[力]失衡，精神錯亂”) seesaw on which the one side sitting a woman with her body shaking(可改爲where a women is sitting with her body shaking on the one side), and on the other side,15 men are going down on their knees asking(改爲to ask，用動詞不定時表示目的) the woman to marry them. The picture reveals the unbalanced(改爲imbalanced)sex ratio in our country. So what causes this phenomenon? In my opinion, there are mainly two reasons. First, the conception "prefer sons to daughters" is very popular in our country. Through(改爲Though，through爲介詞“通過”，though則表示“雖然”) it is not as intensive as in the old society, most parents, especially the ones in remote areas still want to have a son. Further more, along with the "Birth control" policy, some parents would(情態動詞使用不當，可改爲may) choose to abandon their child when they know she is a girl. In order to solve this problem, various measures have to be adopted. As to the government, it should draw up laws to reinforce the punishment of abortion. As to the parents, they should change their prejudice to children, and build up the conception of "It makes no differences if the baby is a girl or a boy". I think under the joint effort of the government and the individuals, the condition of unbalanced(改爲imbalanced) sex ratio will be improved in the near future.
總體點評
整體來說，文章寫得不錯;但還存在個別簡單的語法錯誤。作者在寫作完之後若可以花費幾分鐘時間來回讀文章，便會減少不必要的錯誤。考研作文的整體思路你已經基本掌握，後面要做的就是多積累高分佳句，爲自己的文章增彩;再者，寫完之後一定要認真檢查，減少失分點。
參考分數(滿分20分)：13
英語寫作水平的提升需要不斷地練習，在改正錯誤中不斷取得進步，不怕犯錯誤，怕明知道犯錯誤卻不面對。看了範文和點評，希望大家有思考，有提高。
