考研英語看圖作文範例點評：水污染
看圖作文在英語作文中是大家普遍缺乏練習的一種類型，一個提高的方式就是看範例和點評，針對其中的錯誤進行自我修正。
水污染：
寫作原文
As is vividly depicted in the picture, two drain pipes are draining much sewage into the river while some chimneys emit poison gas into the sky.(首段內容較爲簡略，可適當添加)Why do(改爲does) our environment get more and more bad(表達有誤，“越來越糟”應表示爲worse and worse)? The main reason is(後面若要跟句子，就應該用從句來表述，加that) there are a lot of factories that(去掉) emit so much sewage and poison gas that aren't purified into our nature directly. Besides, we don't have a few good habits, so you can see littering, spitting and smoking frequently. There are so many people who are using plastic course, we need plenty of factories because they will promote the development of our economy. But does it mean that our environment has to be contaminated? Our economy must be development(此處應選擇動詞，改爲developed), but it shouldn't be at the expense of our environment. We shouldn't be so selfish that we disregard the next generation. (一句話中出現兩個we，不妥，建議作者將此句話改爲：We shouldn’t be selfish to disregard to the next generation )We must protect our environment! On the one hand, it isn't until we dispose of sewage and poison gas that we can emit . On the other hand, we must encourage people to give up the bad habit(改爲habits). Let's work together to have a beautiful country!
總體點評
文章結構清晰，內容完整。看着你的作文一天天有所提升，我們爲你感到高興，這些都是你努力的結果。但是，文章中的一些小問題還是值得注意，比如一句話中最好不要出現兩個相同的單詞，遇到這種情況時，可以換一種思路，想想這個句子能不能用其他結構表達，或者該詞能不能用它的近義詞代替等。之前強調的作者應該繼續堅持。
參考分數(滿分20分)：13
英語寫作水平的提升需要不斷地練習，在改正錯誤中不斷取得進步，不怕犯錯誤，怕明知道犯錯誤卻不面對。看了範文和點評，希望大家有思考，有提高。
