考研英語看圖作文範例點評：因材施教
看圖作文在英語作文中是大家普遍缺乏練習的一種類型，一個提高的方式就是看範例和點評，針對其中的錯誤進行自我修正。
因材施教：
寫作原文
The duck mother, who is anxious and energetic, is begging the monkey teacher to teach her children the approach of climbing trees, which give(改爲gives) him a fright. Conspicuously, that is a delicious(用詞不當，delicious一般用來形容美食，故應去掉)ironic(改爲an ironic)depiction concerning blind education,(加and，句子之間用連詞連接)a phenomenon (句子缺謂語，加is)pervasive in contemporary society. This overwhelming, occupy with various kinds of irrational behaviors over children(句子表意不清，建議改爲This overwhelmingly various kind of irrational behaviors), led(改爲lead，句子時態應保持一致)us to conclude that the blind education is more of a devastation to children’s faculties than a reasonable practice. This kind of aimless education kids(加are，be exposed to爲固定短語) exposed to tend to be in (去掉，be exposed to後面直接跟賓語)domestic situation, by, (此處by是什麼意思?)unfortunately, their own parents, who exert great pressure on children’s already over-burdened small shoulder.(改爲children’s over-burdened small shoulders) More ridiculously, many parents know that countless flaws are consist in this way of education and yet most did litter(改爲little，litter意爲“垃圾”) to change it. There are upsetting parallels today, as parents one wave after another force their little kids (加to, force sb. To do sth.)participate in various kinds of out-class courses(“課外課程”可表達爲extra-curriculum courses)(注意句子順序，改爲as parents force their little kids to participate in various kinds of extra-curriculum courses one wave after another), as a result(去掉), their vulnerable heart become(改爲will be) occupied with depression and clear message is that we should get moving to protect our children. Firstly,suitable atmosphere must be created, where our kid can grow freely in harmonious, by us, especially the parents(表述不清新，建議將此部分去掉). Moreover, the authorities should charge with the obligation of fashioning the idea that education entails more than simply teach children numerous disciplines. Rather, making full display of children’s advantage and timely adjustment is(改爲are) of substantial weight. Only by doing this, can we weather this crisis.
總體點評
文章在句子組織方面，存在一些問題。作者應該注意句子的正確表達，弄清楚句子的成分，句與句之間的邏輯關係等。建議作者從句子練起，每週可花幾天積累詞彙、經典語句，然後自己根據積累的情況仿寫句子。在做真題時，注意長難句解析，鞏固基本的語法知識，達到自我提高的目的。
參考分數(滿分20分)：10
英語寫作水平的提升需要不斷地練習，在改正錯誤中不斷取得進步，不怕犯錯誤，怕明知道犯錯誤卻不面對。看了範文和點評，希望大家有思考，有提高。
