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託福寫作怎樣寫出好例子

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我們在複習備考託福寫作的過程中,熟練的使用各種例子,也是大家必備的技能。那麼如何能夠寫出好例子,爲我們的寫作加分呢?本站爲大家整理了一些技巧和方法,供大家參考。

託福寫作怎樣寫出好例子

託福寫作怎樣寫出好例子

例子可以使我們想要表達的觀點或者要闡述的概念更加生動形象,以使得觀點更加地具有說服力。而且針對託福寫作來講,考官比較青睞例證比較好的文章。一般來講,在託福的獨立寫作當中,我們常用的例子包括兩種,一種例子是去描述特別具體的某個人或者某一件事情,這種例子一般比較適合與我們的生活,工作和學習緊密相關的話題。比如“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Keeping old friends is more important than making new friends.”;第二種例子就是假設一個一般化的例子,通過假設一個場景來說明問題,而這種例子的寫法一般比較適合話題比較大的一些話題,比如“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Land needs to be used to meet human need rather than to protect endangered animals.”今天我們就來展示怎樣把這兩種例子寫好。

01具體的例子

Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The students in university should not do any part-time jobs.

Position: Disagree

Reason: Doing part-time jobs can intensify our social ability.

Exemplification: Take myself for example. When I was a fresh man,I found it really hard to get along with people around me. Then I was advised to take a job as a waiter in the restaurant during which I had chances to communicate with different customers, making them satisfied with my “smile” service. After a year, I myself can realize that I have become more outgoing and understanding.

寫一個很具體例子的時候同學們要注意幾個問題:

1、不要寫得特別長,寫太多就變成了記敘文,而我們的獨立寫作是議論文體;

2、這種例子一定要和說理分析性的內容結合在一起才能夠支撐起來一個主體段。

02假設性的例子

假設性的例子有兩點好處。其一就是別人不會懷疑我們寫的這個例子的真實性,二就是假設性的例子其實是analytic example,這種伴隨着分析的例子其實要更符合託福獨立寫作的風格,更能夠體現一個學生的分析能力與水平,畢竟議論文的特點就是分析和證明。

Topic:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Land needs to be used to meet human need rather than to protect endangered animals.

Position:Protect endangered animals

Reason: Another important reason to protect endangered animals is that the delicate ecological balance of an area might be irreparably harmed by their extinction.

Exemplification: For example, if humans chop down forests and use the land to grow corn, they might simultaneously destroy the habitats of a kind of bird that eats locusts. The next year because the locust population can grow unchecked, locusts might destroy the entire nearby corn crop. Not only do the birds lose their homes, but humans are also harmed. The ecological balance of many natural habitats is still not well understood and humans interfere in it at their peril.

通過這一段,大家可以看到假設性的例子的威力。整段文章不長,例子也不多,但是卻非常有效地證明了段首的觀點即保護生態平衡的重要性。所以,文章不一定要寫很多,但是一定要寫好,永遠不要忘了,獨立寫作的靈魂和核心就是去證明一個觀點的合理性和說服力,所以你用的手段很重要。

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所謂細化,就是不要拘泥於單純的題目。一定要進行舉例!比如說:獨立作文題目:Do you agree or disagree the following statement : Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader。與中國大陸獨立作文題目:Some people have ambitious dreams and keep following them, but other people always focus on realistic goals and try to achieve them. Which do you think is better?

第一個題目,大家都覺得很空,“領導力”到底該怎麼找理由,完全沒有頭緒。第二個題目,也是一樣的,“具有挑戰性的夢想”與“現實的目標”感覺遠不如老託福裏面的“是否建立工廠”好想理由。

但是如果我們對於領導力進行舉例,我們自然而然的就會想到喬布斯,絕對是一個超偉大的大企業家,喬布斯有什麼過人的能力呢。1 創新能力,否則不會有iphone與ipad; 2 審美能力,否則Mac的字體不會那麼漂亮,iphone也不會那麼完美 ;3 堅韌不拔的能力,否則也不會建立皮克斯東山再起。再來想創新能力,我們可以通過旅遊來獲得,什麼可以通過學習來獲得,堅韌可以通過體育來獲得。到這,不也就找到了寫作的方向了麼。

託福作文備考找理由,切忌就事論事,其實只要我們大膽的進行舉例,然後需要的時候,再適當提煉,其實作文思路是非常好尋找的。就像給姑娘寫情書的時候,你也不能只寫我愛你,還一定要寫“不看你的眼,不看你的眉,看的時候心裏跳,看過以後眼淚垂,不看你的眼,不看你的 眉,不看你也愛上你,忘了我是誰”這裏的眼與眉不都是舉例麼。

託福作文畫龍點睛需要六步

1 首先關於篇幅:請大家務必要把作文的長度保持在300字以上,最好能有400字左右。

2 其次是你文章的文體格式(style):是不是按照ETS所要求的論文體(academic)來寫的。

3 看你在文章中是否有修辭:大家不妨在文章中使用排比、擬人、比喻等修辭手法,甚至引用和倒裝這樣的假修辭都會是你的加分法寶。

4 要注意你關鍵句的句型:關鍵句是指首段觀點句、理由段首句和結論段首句。關鍵句一定要使用複雜句,最好是使用我上課時曾經分析過的倒裝句或強調句。

5 用詞是否多樣化:同一意思儘量用不同的詞來表達而不要重複。

6 看你的例子是否完美支持中心思想,這一點是最近才提出的,也是考生們比較難把握的,我建議大家平時多看託福寫作題庫,結合多思考,多蒐集話題,爭取做到爛熟於胸。

託福寫作二十一個失分點

1. 託福寫作段落過長,不分段主語與動詞一致問題She are a good friend of mine that I has known for a long time.主語和動詞在數方面不一致。

2.文章結構不平行:I was able to raise my TOEFL score by studying hard and I read lots of books.當使用連詞將一系列的單詞聯接起來的時候,應當使用詞性相同或同一類型的短語。

3.不知所云:Many companies began using computers mouth.

4.句子彆扭We heated the soup in the microwave for too long and the shape of the container changed.措辭過長或不清。換言之,句子顯得滑稽可笑。

5.不要使用縮寫在正式的寫作中。不要使用縮寫形式(can’t,don’t,it’s,we’ll,they’ve等等),而應當使用單詞的完整形式(cannot,do not,it is,we will,they have等等)。

6.關聯詞語重複Since I want to go to a good school, therefore I am trying to raise my test scores.不能在該句的主要主語和主要動詞前使用連詞。

7.句子不完整Many students have a hard time passing all the tests to gets into college. For example, my friend in high school.句子沒有主要主語或主要動詞,因爲其實它應是一個從句。這是一個非常常見的錯誤,修改的方法是將兩個句子連接起來。

8.書寫難以辨認信息不正確I would like to study in America because all modern technology originated there.傳的信息不正確,或者讓人聽起來覺得可能不正確(如果確實是正確的,應當解釋爲什麼這樣,因爲讀者不認爲是正確的)。上述例句中,all的意 思是百分之百;我們不能絕對地說每一件新東西都是從美國誕生的。爲保險起見,應當使用many或most。非英語單詞Computers are very helpful and advantageable.儘管看起來象個單詞,其實不是,至少不是個英文單詞。使用這個單詞的另一種形式。

9.介詞多餘I would like to discuss about something important that you mentioned about to me during yesterday. We went to downtown yesterday to buy a watch. When I first came to the US, I did not have a lot of friends in here. In class, my classmate never mentioned about her husband.在表示這種意思時此單詞不能與介詞連用。這種情況常見於downtown,home,there,here等詞。這些詞語在英語中是副詞而非名詞,因而不能在它們前面添加介詞。

10.跑題或不相關There are many reasons to buy a car, preferably a nice car.這個意思與okay for children to fail sometimes.所表達的意思很普通大多數人都已經知道到了,因而就沒有必要再說出來。

11.標點問題I love animals. And I like to help them. Because they are helpless. So I want to become a vet.這是一個非常普遍的問題!許多學生在句子中使用了太多的句號,尤其是當他們用手寫的時候。

12.重複冗餘Personally, I believe what the newspaper prints.一種意思的表述不止一次,或者某個詞語不必要。

13.單數/複數Many year ago, dinosaur roamed the Earths.單詞需要從單數變爲複數,或者由複數變成單數。單數可數名詞單數可數名詞不能單獨使用,應該將其變爲複數形式或者加上限定詞(a, the, my, his, her, Gary’s, no, any, 1, 3, 50, most,等等)。

14.拼寫錯誤主語、動詞或賓語有問題I want to buy something for my mother that she will like it. There was a terrible accident happen yesterday.句子的基本結構有問題 缺少主語、動詞或賓語,或者這些成分重複。

15.語氣與文章不符I was kind of mad at the guy who vociferated angry words at me. I have heard many wonderful things about such cosmopolitan cities as Paris, London, Tokyo, and Hong Kong and I would love to visit these cities to check them out.語氣與文章其他部分不相符可能是過於正式或者太不正式。

16.代詞指代不明If people do not speak the same language, it has a greater chance of miscommunication. I intend to complete my studies in the United States because they have good programs there.代詞所指代的指示詞(介詞所代替的名詞)不清楚。

17.過於籠統We should use our resources on Earth because the Earth is getting worse. 句子或它所表達的意思過於籠統,不能提供多少信息。

18.動詞時態錯誤Yesterday I will go to the store because tomorrow I needed some food.動詞時態不正確檢查一下是應該用現在時、過去時、將來時還是完成時等等。

19.選詞不恰當I was late getting home because I lost my way.在這種情況下不應該使用該詞可選擇更好的詞語或者所使用的詞語與文章的總體語氣不符。

20.單詞形式不當I want to creation a great web site so that I can becoming wealth.所使用的單詞的形式不正確檢查一下應該使用該詞的名詞、形容詞或副詞形式的哪一種。

21.用詞錯誤Even I don’t speak Spanish, I was able to find a bathroom in the department store. I gained a lot of pounds during vacation.用詞錯誤或在此種情況下該詞不是最佳用詞。