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託福獨立寫作怎麼審題

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託福寫作時審題是非常重要的,對分數影響很大,下面小編就來和大家分享一下怎麼審題。

託福獨立寫作怎麼審題

新託福獨立寫作審題方法及寫作佈局

一、審題的“精確性”

根據專家對於過去2年獨立寫作考題的分析,發現有90%以上的題目屬於“支持/反對”型:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Because the change of the society is so rapidly, people are less happy or less satisfied with their life than people did in the past time.

而剩下的則是由“對比論述型”構成的:

2011.03.13

Some people think children should spend most of their time in studying and playing while others think they should help their parents with the household chores. What’s your opinion?

在審題時,考生必須首先把題目通讀1-3遍,徹底把握題目主旨後,方可進行段落佈局。在這裏,筆者結合自己的經驗給考生們一些建議:首先,判斷題目是否包含“絕對”含義的詞,若有,則按照上篇講過的建議佈局,若沒有,則對於同意或者反對的理由進行快速的brain storming, 然後根據分論點的數量及論點的可延展性來敲定立場:

Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Disagree:

1) Endangered animals are valuable because of their limited quantities

2) Environment balance

3) Endangered animals sometimes stand for the country, so they are more valuable than farmlands

Agree:

1) life quality is the top priority

2) endangered animals can be raised in the zoos

經過一番考量,假如考生得出了上述的一些分論點及想法,這時候,主體段的佈局基本就可以敲定大方向了。第一種就是完全反對題目的說法,採用五段式結構佈局,每個主體段論證上述三個分論點中的一個;第二種也是反對題目的說法,採用五段式結構佈局,但是前2個主體段從三個分論點中選二個去論證,而第三個主體段從“同意”的二個分論點裏去選一個,最後的結論還是傾向於反對的。

第三種是採用四段式結構佈局,即第一個主體段從三個反對意見中選擇二到三個分論點去寫,而第二個主體段則從贊同的分論點裏去選擇,數量上比前一段少一個即可,最後結論還是傾向於反對多一點。這樣說是不是有些同學看了會有點“暈”呢?那下面筆者就再舉個簡單點的例子吧:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

Disagree:

1) Most people are common, so they want to know something about famous ones

2) Famous people stand for some fashion

3) Constrain the public figures

4) Celebrities can improve the national cohesion and unity

又經過了幾分鐘思考,我們得出了上述的四個分論點,但是一時半會贊同的理由實在是想不出。若考試的時候遇到這種情況,千萬別猶豫不決,馬上從已經想好的觀點裏面進行挑選。於是,這個題目我們就採用完全反對的立場,以五段式結構佈局全文,主體段的分論點從上述四點中挑選三個展開論述即可。這樣一來,大家是不是明白一點了呢?

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Agree: Parents make decision for children.

1) Parents have more experience

2) 15-18 years old children are not adults, so they can't take responsibility

還有一種情況就是我們只能想出兩個分論點,這時候考生應該果斷採用四段式佈局,而這一次,兩個主體段都分別論述一個同意的理由,而在結尾時,可以順便提一些反對的理由,這樣也不失爲一種靈活的方法,希望考生們可以借鑑。

二、分論點的排列原則

專家提醒考生們,在佈局的時候我們不是隨意編排分論點的先後順序,而是需要有一定的邏輯性和合理性。一般說來,五段式的三個主體段,若都是同意或者都是反對的理由的話,一般這些分論點有兩種邏輯順序,即第一種按照“重要性”來排,將你認爲最主要的理由放在第一個主體段中詳細論證;第二種是按照“小到大”的原則,即個人方面的理由先寫,然後再是家庭,公司,最後再是社會,國家等。

倘若所有的論點都是在一個範圍內的,比如都是屬於個人的論點,則這個時候要看這些分論點後續的論證內容的多少,比如某一個分論點你既舉得出例子,又可以進行對比或者因果論述的話那肯定應該先寫這個分論點,若某一個分論點後續能夠闡述的理由只有一句話的時候那就應該果斷地將其排在後面寫。若文章是四段式的結構,則在一個主體段中的排列順序和前面講的原則是一致的。

 托福考試:託福獨立寫作審題問題詳解

案例1:誤解原意思

Do you agree or disagree: Because people are busy with doing so many things, they can do few things well?

Original:

Some people may hold the view that they are able to do things well even if they are busy with doing so many things simultaneously or during a given period. Although plausible at the first glance, I disagree with the statement. Depending on my own personal experience and personality, I firmly maintain that people can do few things well when they are busy with doing so many things. My arguments of this opinion are listed as follows.

解析:

文章第一句話不是對原題目意思進行解釋,而是採用採取了和原意思相反的做法來進行題目詮釋;第二句表明自己對誤解題目的觀點;第三句話對自己的觀點進行近一步的解釋;第四句一個過渡性的句子。開篇內容安排倒是很好,但是作者犯了誤解原題目意思的錯誤導致後面整個文字都做了無用功。

Revised:

When people are engaged in a large extent of work simultaneously, they will not be able to perform all of them perfectly. Just imagine how terrible it will be: too many jobs need to be done by the same person in a given time. Once such a picture appears in my mind, I feel dizzy. To me, it is impossible to do everything well with the limited energy and many others factors efore , I agree with the statement too many things to be done at the same time cause few to be well done . The reasons are as follow.

Revised:

第一句話對原題目意思進行了很好的詮釋;第二、三句話進一步解釋原題目;第四句話提出自己的觀點;第五句話過渡性句子引起下文。

案例2 :語言羅嗦,繞彎子給出自己觀點,浪費時間

Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

original:

With the development of science and technology, people’s living standard has been improving day by day. According to the family plan, one couple could have only one child. So child becomes the center of the whole family. Some of them are even spoiled. Therefore, I think it is better if the young adult could live independent from their parents as soon as possible.

解析:

這個開頭看似沒有任何問題,但是仔細分析就會發現很多問題。首先,作者繞了個大彎纔給出自己的觀點。其次,觀點是對原題目的抄寫,改動的比較少。最後,開篇缺少引起下文的過渡句。更大的錯誤是這個開頭更像是一個全文主要觀點的一個分論點。

Revised:

As we all know, some young adults have the sense of independence in a special period so that they want to choose to live apart from their family, while others still choose to stay with parents in the family. Family can provide young adults a warm bay where he or she could turn to whenever any problems arise. However, considering the sound development of the young adult both mentally and physically, I think to live independently the earlier, the better. Independence is a lesson that each of us must face one day. The detailed reasons are listed below.

解析:

第一句話詮釋原題目意思;第二句話進一步解釋第一句話;第三句話提出自己的觀點;第四句話解釋自己的觀點,引出下文。

託福獨立寫作開篇第一段是整個文章的主機調,這個部分如果出現問題整個文章就會黯然失色。

  託福獨立寫作常見的審題誤區

審題,是寫作的第一步,卻經常被大家所忽略。有太多考生只着眼於如何寫出漂亮的句子和高級的詞彙,而沒有搞清寫作的本質--考察學生針對某一話題進行準確連貫表述的能力。這也是爲什麼很多同學雖然英語不弱,在托福考試的獨立部分中卻只能拿到 fai r或 good 當中較低的4分。那麼到底怎樣才能更加容易地拿到獨立寫作的滿分呢? 筆者今天將通過列舉以往考過的真題進行解析,告訴大家如何審題,換句話說,如何使高分變得更加achievable。

同學們考寫作考了這麼多年,大多數出題的形式都已爛熟於心,看到題目之後覺得熟悉於是興沖沖提筆就寫,其實,這種看似"熟練"的表象下藏着巨大的隱患--同學們很有可能因爲看得太快而忽略某個決定題目意思的關鍵詞。例如:

例1:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the only main cause for people's unhealthy eating habits.

看到這個題目,同學們立刻會開始想,有沒有other reasons for unhealthy habits,想出三條如:1. People's tight schedules do not allow them to eat at regular hours; 2. Sometimes people are eager to lose weight or to keep fit so that they go on "endless diets"; 3. Bearing heavy burden both physically and mentally, some consider eating constantly as their most effective stress reliever. 綜上所述,advertising is not the only cause.

這個寫法看起來非常完備,但其實犯了一個不起眼卻嚴重的錯誤--題目不是要我們證明it is not the only cause,而是要我們去證明it is not the only main cause。多一個"main",意思是很不一樣的。如果我們只需要證明it is not the only cause,那麼找出other causes即可即例1中的寫法。但是,如果我們要證明it is not the only main cause,就需要證明other causes that we mentioned are also main causes,這就需要在每一段中加上一些專門的說明。或者,更簡單的辦法是去證明advertising is not even a cause, 直接在每段的末尾加上advertising與該段所論述的unhealthy eating habit無關的論述即可。If it is not a cause, how can it be the onlymain cause? 這樣一來,就不用通過證明還有其他main cause來反駁了,事實上,證明某種cause是main cause還是挺有難度的,因此筆者推薦同學們用後一種方式進行論述。因此,文章還是disagree,而三段的主題句分別應該是:1、1. People's tight schedules do not allow them to eat at regular hours, and it is obvious that they are too busy to be influenced by advertising; 2. Sometimes people are eager to lose weight or to keep fit so that they go on "endless diets", and this is more like a result of human nature, the pursuit of beauty, but not advertising; 3. Bearing heavy burden both physically and mentally, some consider eating constantly as their most effective stress reliever, and it is quite clear that no advertising encourages them to do so.

例2:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges and universities should offer more preparation for student before they start working.

看到這個題目,很多同學會可能會這樣寫:Agree. 1. Students should take morespecializedcourses(專業課)in order to be knowledgeable and skillful enough for their future careers(接着開始論述being knowledgeable and skillful的重要性); icipating in internships helps students to have a clearer picture of their vocational development in the future(接着開始論述,如果沒有實過習,在工作的時候是多麼地feel so unprepared); 3. Attending more club activities is an effective way to improve social skills, which are crucial for success both in life and at work(接着開始論述good social skills對職業和生活的幫助).如果不看括號裏的內容,僅看主題句,這篇文章是沒有任何問題的。然而,括號中的論述從嚴格意義上來講,是不能支持"more"這個關鍵詞的。舉個簡單的例子:"我們需要錢"和"我們需要更多錢"在證明的時候重點是不一樣的。如果證明"我們需要錢",應該詳細

闡述錢的"不可或缺性",比如生活、學習、教育都需要錢;但是如果證明"我們需要更多錢",重點則應該放在"錢不夠"的論述上,證明在學習、生活、教育方面的預算都很緊張。同樣地,上面的題目中僅僅證明Knowledge for careers, field experience and social skills are important是不夠的,事實上,這些根本不需要證明,需要證明的事情是graduates today are not well prepared in the three aspects. 因此這篇文章應該是一篇"抱怨型"的文章,詳細地去論述學校工作的不足。參考思路如下:Agree. 1. Many students today complain that they cannot learn practical skills and up-to-date information, for some of their teachers are not qualified enough to teach specialized courses; 2. Since many students are not allowed enough time to participate in internship programs before graduation, they know very little about what their future jobs like; 3. Joining clubs is possible for every college student, yet not every club provide is capable of offering enough opportunities for students to practice their social skills.

同學們在寫文章的時候一定要注意,學術論文寫作不是句型和辭藻的堆砌,整篇文章一定是一個well-organized system,這個system中很重要的原則之二就是--

1、每個中間段的topic sentence是用來支持main idea的;

2、topic sentence後面的每句話都是用來支持該topic sentence的。在上面的兩個例子中,大家會發現例1的錯誤主要是main idea沒有很好地被topic sentence支持;而例2的錯誤在於topic sentence雖然看起來是支持main idea的,但是論述的內容可能跟關鍵詞"more"無關,從而不能有力地支持topic sentences。這些錯誤的起因,則是對題幹中關鍵詞的忽略。