雅思寫作真題解析 需要更多措施防止犯罪

在雅思寫作備考中，想要提升寫作的水平，我們需要做的大量的練習。真題練習是必不可少的，今天小編為大家準備的是雅思寫作真題解析-需要更多措施防止犯罪，大家可以參考一下解析中的答題思路，幫助我們進行更有效的備考。　　

A類雅思寫作真題解析-需要更多措施防止犯罪

觀點類大作文犯罪類話題

Many people are afraid of leaving house because of crime. Some think more action should be taken to prevent crime, but others think little can be done. What is your view?(題目來源：2015年9月3日大陸雅思大作文)

題目大意

很多人因為犯罪害怕出門。一些人認為應該採取更多的措施來阻止犯罪，然而其他人認為犯罪無法阻止。問你的觀點。

寫作思路

這道題目是一道犯罪類話題的題目。犯罪類話題是雅思考試的高頻題目，基本上每年必考個四五次。這道題目出題的角度有點怪，説的是害怕出門。當然了，作為生活在天朝的子民來説，這種話有點可笑，但是好在只是背景，不是問題本身。問題是能否有措施有效地阻止犯罪。個人認為當然是可以的。如果我們啥都不做，犯罪只會越來越多。文章就從幾個方面入手介紹犯罪阻止的方法，所以這道題目其實是一道羅列觀點型題目。

審題，找出敏感詞/限定詞

Action，限定詞，measure等

Prevent，限定詞，deter，cease，halt等

高分範文

An ongoing topic of debate in traffic safety world has been whether the age for driving should be raised or not. Typically, the legal age to drive alone needs to be 17 or so, but there is a proposal, underpinned by some groups.

It is fairly hard to imagine that home has become the only place of safety in modern society, where residents are worried about various kinds of crimes, street robbery, car theft and even shooting. This is obligation of the government to protect the civil life and work, which, I think, could be classified into three aspects.

First, deterring potential crimes is considered as a direct way to improve living environment for residents. Some strict laws and regulations should be imposed on specific crime cases. For example, prolonging the term of imprisonment could be an effective way to deter crimes, like theft and robbery. Also, lowering the minimum crime age on punishment is another solution to ordinary crimes because younger criminals are liable to escape from punishments.

Second, the high rate of crimes is derived partly from the widening gap of living in cities. Therefore, creating more job opportunities after investing in manufactures and public services could, to some degree, bring about stable incomes. Reduction in the number of the homeless and unemployed contributes to decline in the level of social chaos and conflicts. When everyone is satisfied with the company they work for and the salary they are paid, there may be no need for them to risk committing crimes.

Third, popularity of primary and secondary education or opening more technical schools is an urgent task. People who live in slums with minimum education more probably commit crimes than those with decent education and comparatively higher social status. Therefore, the level of education reflects living condition and public security in communities, which for a long term is regarded as the foundation of civilized society.

In conclusion, there are plenty of solutions to crimes and social problems, which depend on effectiveness of activities and continuous efforts from both government and individuals.

相關詞彙

Street robbery街道搶劫

Car theft 偷車

Obligation責任

Classify分類

Deter震懾

Be imposed on強加於

Prolong延長

Imprisonment關監獄

Be liable to 易於做某事

Be derived from 由 而產生

Social chaos社會混亂

Conflict衝突

Slum貧民窟

Decent體面的

Comparatively相對而言地

　　雅思作文:犯罪原因與處理範文解析

寫作題目

Should criminals be sent to prison or should they do something else as a punishment? Explain your opinion and give your reason.

You should write at least 250 words. You should use your own ideas of knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

範文

In recent years, a growing number of people have begun to challenge against the existing practice of sending criminals to prison. They argue that the law offenders should be punished to do something for the public. In my opinion, however, they should be locked up in prisons.

First of all, it can ensure a safe and comfortable living environment to the law-abiding citizens. For criminals like thieves, robbers, rapists or even murderers, it is improper or even dangerous to let them out of jails, because they still pose threat to our society. Just as an old saying goes, Mercy to the criminal may be cruelty to the people.

The imprisonment of criminals not only punishes the criminals but also deters the potential criminals. It will make would-be criminals think twice before they commit a crime. Researches reveal that there is a direct link between the implementation of imprisoning criminals and the decline of crime rate. Without the practice, the world would be in great chaos and full of blood and violence.

Some people may say that the practice lays heavy financial burden on the government. In fact, if the police want the behaviour of the criminals to be under control, they have to spend more money and time in supervising the criminals after they are set free. Furthermore, once the criminals commit crimes again, it will take the police much trouble to catch them. In addition, the loss and the damage to the victims will be irreparable.

From what I mentioned above, it is not difficult to draw a conclusion that criminals should be imprisoned in jails and receive compulsory reclaim.

雅思寫作真題及解析：解決犯罪問題，教育比監獄更有效嗎

“In many countries, prison is the most common solution to the problem of crime. However, another effective way is to provide people with better education so that they can not become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

本題是2012年5月12日的原題重現。如果説2017年雅思寫作考試對2014年情有獨鍾，2018年似乎返祖現象更為嚴重，已經考過的很多場都是在重複2013年甚至更早的原題，這給我們的複習備考帶來了一定的難度。

但萬變不離其宗，我們備考雅思寫作，首先是要清楚其要求，然後按照要求去逐步落實，而不是把全部希望寄託在押題上。

本次考試是關於犯罪話題，這也是雅思考試每年都會出現幾次的題材。總結了一下近幾年雅思作文中關於犯罪的話題，列舉如下：

Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (2015/4/25;2015/6/18; 2013/11/9)青少年犯罪是否該受到與成年人一樣的懲罰?(出現3次)

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree? (2015/8/8) 請改造過後的犯人給學生講犯罪的危害，可否?

People are afraid to leave their homes for fear of crimes. Some people believe that more action should be taken to prevent crimes while others think that little could be done. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. (2015/8/29; 2012/11/3) 我們已經沒有辦法阻止犯罪嗎?(出現2次)

Children are committing more crimes. What are the causes? How to punish them? (2014/8/2; 2010/8/5) 兒童犯罪增多的原因，怎樣處罰他們?(出現2次)

Some think most crime is the result of circumstances e.g. poverty and other social problems. Other believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.(2014/11/8) 犯罪的原因到底是社會原因還是人性原因?

In most countries,prison is an effective solution to the problem of crime. Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide education for those who violate the law. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (2012/5/12) 還有比監獄更好的辦法來解決犯罪問題嗎?

A recent newspaper article report that a 14 years old boy who seriously destroyed his school got a punishment to clean streets instead of being sent to the prison, Do you think this is right, or the young criminals should be sent to the jail? (2016/1/14) 青少年損壞公物後被罰掃街，這種處罰合適嗎?

回到本次題目，大家首先要弄清楚，題目要求我們討論的觀點是什麼。這裏，提出瞭解決犯罪問題的兩個措施，一是監獄，二是教育，問的是教育是不是有效，或者教育是不是比監獄更有效。

很明顯，監獄和教育都是解決犯罪問題的辦法，而且很難比較哪個更有效，但兩者在解決犯罪問題時所起的功能還是不同的：監獄更多的是一種補救和威懾，而教育則是預防。

因此，本題就可以沿着這個思路，去論證監獄如何起到一種補救和威懾的作用，而教育如何可以預防人們犯罪。

本場考試範文

In many parts of the world, people who have violated the law are put into prison, which is a very effective way of preventing them committing more crimes. However, many experts believe that better education is probably an even more effective way of addressing the problem of crime. I would suggest that both prison and education are important and each plays a different role in crime control.

Prison is certainly a place where criminals can be made to understand what wrong they have done to other people and why what they have done before is not socially acceptable. In this way, these criminals will have a better chance to come back to normal life. On top of the remedial function, prison can serve as a deterrent for those with an inclination to crime. The likelihood of losing freedom in prison can most effectively stop them from doing harms to the society and other individuals.

Better education can also bring down the overall crime rate in any community, and it is the most desirable preventive measure against crime. To start with, education improves people’s moral standards which enable them to tell right from wrong so that they will build a robust inner wall against any antisocial behaviors. More importantly, people with better education are always able to find a satisfying career that will reward them with a decent life, and they will never think of committing any crime.

In conclusion, prison with its remedial and deterrent function and education with its preventive function are both needed in order to make this world a safer place for all of us to live in.(273 words)

　　雅思Simon考官大作文範文：罪犯用親身經歷告訴青少年不要犯罪

題目：

　Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime.

　To what extent do you agree or disagree?

有些人進了號子之後放出來就變乖了，一些人覺得他們這夥人是最適合去給懵懂少年現身説法的。多大程度上同意還是不同意?

考官範文：

1.開頭段：完全同意題目的觀點

It is true that ex-prisoners can become normal, productive members of society. I completely agree with the idea that allowing such people to speak to teenagers about their experiences is the best way to discourage them from breaking the law.

講真有犯罪前科的前科的人是可以變成有益於社會的。我完全同意讓他們去給懵懂少年現身説法的主意，這是一種警示他們不要觸犯法律的好辦法。

2.主體段：(第一個理由)：犯人可以告訴青少年他們真實的犯罪經歷。年輕人會相信並被這些真實的故事所震懾，然後舉例子

In my opinion, teenagers are more likely to accept advice from someone who can speak from experience. Reformed offenders can tell young people about how they became involved in crime, the dangers of a criminal lifestyle, and what life in prison is really like. They can also dispel any ideas that teenagers may have about criminals leading glamorous lives. While adolescents are often indifferent to the guidance given by older people, I imagine that most of them would be extremely keen to hear the stories of an ex-offender. The vivid and perhaps shocking nature of these stories is likely to have a powerful impact.

在我看來，騷年們更喜歡接受有實踐經歷的人來講道理。勞改犯可以告訴年輕人他們是如何參與到犯罪中去的，如何體驗危險的犯罪生活，和號子裏面的真實情況。他們也可以打消一些年輕人覺得犯罪可以走向人生巔峯的無知念頭。一些年輕人對老人言其實還蠻冷漠的。我可以想象他們大部分還是超級想聽有犯罪前科人所講的故事。生動和可能恐怖的故事會更有説服力。

3.主體段：(第二個理由)：讓老師或警察來教育年輕人，不過這幾個效果不一定很好

The alternatives to using reformed criminals to educate teenagers about crime would be much less effective. One option would be for police officers to visit schools and talk to young people. This could be useful in terms of informing teens about what happens to lawbreakers when they are caught, but young people are often reluctant to take advice from figures of authority. A second option would be for school teachers to speak to their students about crime, but I doubt that students would see teachers as credible sources of information about this topic. Finally, educational films might be informative, but there would be no opportunity for young people to interact and ask questions.

另外一種讓勞改犯教育騷年的辦法可能就沒那麼用了。一個選擇是讓警察去學校開講座教導騷年們。這個對於讓少年們知道關於觸犯法律被逮着之後會發生什麼還是有點用的，不過年輕人對於權威的數據還是有那麼點叛逆的。第二個選擇是學校老師告訴孩子們犯罪是什麼，不過我並不覺得孩子們會把老師講的當做犯罪話題的重點信息來源。最終，教育類電影可能有丟丟用，不過這種讓孩子沒有了互動和提問的機會。

4.總結段：總結觀點

In conclusion, I fully support the view that people who have turned their lives around after serving a prison sentence could help to deter teenagers from committing crimes.

總之，我完全支持迴歸社會的勞改犯們幫助減少青少年們犯罪。

(287 words, band 9)

必記改寫：

1.I completely agree with the idea that=I fully support the view that

me normal, productive members of society= turned their lives around

-prisoners=after serving a prison sentence

ourage them=deter teenagers

king the law=committing crimes